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托福口语优秀范文以及点评:18岁成人投出选票

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2018-04-14 15:00

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  对于很多正在准备考托福的同学们来说,不知道准备得怎么样呢?今天就和出国留学网的小编一起来了解一下托福口语优秀范文以及点评:18岁成人投出选票。

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  托福口语题目:

  Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? 18-year-old adults are not mature enough to vote.

  托福口语参考范文:

  In my opinion, 18-year-old people already have the ability to vote. Firstly, because I think when we are 18, we are adults, which means we can take responsibility for our behaviors and actions. (At the age of 18, we begin to make decisions independently, and thus our votes can represent our own opinions)【括号内的也可以不说】 And also I think young people above 18 are very concerned about the future of the country and they have the ability to reason and also enough knowledge about politics, which will help them to make right decisions. 补充例子:For example, my friends and I are just 18 years old, and we often surf online to learn about the information related to national policies. And our politics teachers always tell us not to just repeat what others say but think by ourselves. So we are mature enough to vote.

  托福口语参考答案:

  Well, I don't think I can agree with statement because I think +people who are already 18 years old are mature enough to vote.【也可以直接说: In my opinion, 18-year-old people already have the ability to vote.】

  Firstly, because I think when we are 18, we are adults, which means we can take responsibility for the our behaviors and actions. (At the age of 18, we begin to make decisions independently, and thus our votes can represent our own opinions)【补充了一些细节,否则,这第一个理由根本就没有论证,丢下一句:我18,我成年了,就走了……哎~不要这么傲娇嘛!至少稍微结合咱们的话题解释一句嘛!】

  And also I think young people above 18 are very concerned about the future of the country and they have the ability to reason and also enough knowledge about politics, which will help them to make right decisions.

  补充例子(可以跟着Pt的答案一路说到结尾):For example, my friends and I are just 18 years old, and we often surf online to learn about hte information related to national policies. And our politics teachers always tell me, "Please don't just repeat what others say but think by yourself, think critically." So I am pretty sure that we are mature enough to vote. (/ 语速快的同学,可以挑战加长版结尾So I am pretty sure that we have the capability to decide what is good for the nation and the people and thus we definitely are old enough to vote. )

  这纯粹为了凑时间的结尾,可以不读了:So I think they have both the right and capability to decide what is good for the nations and what is good for the people. So that's why I think they are old enough and mature enough to vote.【很啰嗦,其实就是因为没有内容了,所以用漫长的结尾来拖时间】

  托福口语模板分析:

  本文来自高分网友shurui,非常赞的发音!这一次之所以没有选择晨读团同学的录音,并不是因为大家的答案【内容】不够好,而是因为:大家的【发音】错误真的太多了!

  shurui同学是亦鸥有名的淡定大神,不论什么内容,她都说得从容不迫。这一题的答案虽然:很空洞,但因为发音非常标准,整体的表达十分流利,第一遍听依然觉得真的很棒!每一次在收听大量晨读团同学的录音时,Pt都感到,有一件事不得不承认:发音好真的太重要!1)发音不标准的,根本听不懂啊!2)发音有口音的,听着很难受啊!3)发音特别好的,心里就觉得ta答得好啊!所以,强烈建议大家,正音,从今天开始!

  这里就不得不再一次强调:我们要做的是【跟读】。除了学内容之外,还要学答题者的发音,要去模仿,去跟着读。请大家不要仅是查看推送的内容,然后就开始自己读了——那你的发音错误永远也改不了哇!一定要点击阅读原文,收听高分回答,并收听Pt在晨读团里的语音示范,每天坚持再坚持,就一定能跟发音错误说88!

  在此,说一下本题的几个常见错误发音:

  adult 这个音已经被大家念出花儿来了,Pt听到最奇葩的发音是:“矮倒他”……这都什么鬼???请注意:这个音是/ˈædʌlt/ 或者 /ə'dʌlt/ (注意,a这个原因发音不同的时候,重音也不一样哦!shuirui读的就是/ˈædʌlt/ )不要跟我说你的“矮倒他”是英音!英音里的a也不会发成“矮”哒!

  mature 这个音,也是各种不同版本,听得Pt都快怀疑人生了。有人读“吗ture”有人读“马ture” 还有人连ture都不对,读成了“吗ter”。那真是。。。谁能听出来你在说“成熟”啊!我还以为想说master然后吞了s呢!请注意:这个音是/mə'tʃʊər/ 前面不是/ma/是/mə/ 哦!

  vote 请大家注意哦!v在发音的时候,要用上牙轻轻咬一下下唇~不要出现漏风的效果!

  接下来,Pt来解释一下我的修改:

  1. 【不能拿18 years old当“18岁的人”来讲】I think +people who are already 18 years old are mature enough to vot

  18岁的人,正确的说法如下:

  A. 18-year-old people 【作定语,通常都是这样,加了连字符,就成了形容词啦!比如:在校的活动 on-campus activities】

  B. people who are 18 【作表语】

  C. people who are 18 years old 【作表语】

  2. 【18岁,我们能够对“我们的”行为负责 + behavior是不可数名词】we can take responsibility for the our behaviors and actions

  3.【一个发音错误】 I think young people above 18 are very concerned about the future of the country 这里的concerned,被shurui发成了concered,中间那个n被吞了!这是我们大家也经常犯的错误。建议再练习一下environment和government,也是要注意:不要吞n! (加入晨读团,收听Pt的语音示范~)

  4. 【没有细节】节选一下优秀录音下方的网友点评(是的,亦鸥的网友们就是这么犀利!这才能进步呀!不痛不痒、你好我好大家好的点评,有啥用?!)

  - 我觉得你没给出充足理由解释 为什么mature到可以vote。其他方面都ok。

  shuirui的回应:

  - 首先感谢你的点评.因为1)成年人了,可以为行为负责 2)具有独立思考的能力 3)具有相关的知识 2+3)可以做出正确的判断.

  围观群众表示:

  - 语言考试不太关注内容,能够顺下来就很不错了。如果内容要改进,最好有一个具体事例。

  shuirui的回应:

  - 我也觉得有具体例子更好,可是想半天没想出来呀...

  在此,Pt给出回应:

  1. 语言考试并不是完全不看内容哦~ 但就像我在前面讲到的:【语音确实加分!】不过,【内容也不容忽视!】

  2. 增加细节和例子并不难,Pt已经示范啦~

  A. details 是把你说的事情具体化,如: we can take responsibility for the our behaviors and actions.我们能对自己的行为负责,具体化后: At the age of 18, we begin to make decisions independently, and thus our votes can represent our own opinions.我们自己独立做决策,因此我们的选票能够代表自己的意见。

  B. exemplification 是把你说的事情搞成一个具体的事件,如: young people above 18 are very concerned about the future of the country. 年轻人关心国家的未来。具体到一个例子:For example, my friends and I are just 18 years old, and we often surf online to learn about the information related to national policies. 我和我的小伙伴,我们就成天看新闻。

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